Tuesday, April 25, 2017

Editing: Comma Usage

One of our goals with understanding the simple sentence and dependent clauses (DEP) and the role of the comma is to understand that they allow for a variety of syntax (sentence structure), which allows for your more complex ideas to be expressed in creative but coherent ways. 

Rather than getting mastered by grammar rules, try and master the fundamental rules of word structure that make our language.  (I mean, that is what many of you are already doing with texting language--creating a grammar.)


Independent Clause / the Simple Sentence (Review)

  • Nouns: person, place, thing
  • Verbs: show action
  • Subject:  noun or pronoun that performs the action
  • Object: noun or pronoun that receives the action
  • Includes a subject (noun/pronoun) + verb
    • Examples: I write. She coughs. They run. The lamp shines.

  • Often, though, we need to include the object (a noun, too) after the verb=
    • Examples: I write poetry. They run laps.



Before we look at the graphic, let's see how modifiers can create skillfully complex sentences out of basic information:


1. The famous Russian novelist Vladimir Nabokov once said, "Style and Structure are the essence of a book; great ideas are hogwash.” 

  • Simple sentence:  Vladimir Nabokov...said, "...."
2.  Since he is known for Lolita, a novel about a creepy old man obsessed with a little girl, a reader may be shocked to find that Nabokov thought structure was more important than the idea itself.

  • Simple sentence:   A reader may be shocked to find that Nabokov thought structure was more important than the idea itself.
  • "Since he is known for Lolita," = dependent clause that added context to subject
  • ", a novel about a creepy old man obsessed with a little girl," = dependent clause that adds meaning to the noun that comes right before it, Lolita. 
  • This entire phrase/clause is not necessary for a reader to understand the simple sentence, which is why commas are used to "put up a fence around it."  We can take out the entire clause and the sentence will still be grammatically clear:  
  • Since he is known for Lolitaa reader may be shocked to find that Nabokov thought structure was more important than the idea itself.


The Role of the Comma 
  • How do we look at dependent clauses and adjectives and adverbs?
  • Modifiers of basic meaning/thought of the sentence
  • Different types of context that add to the basic thought/sentence
  • What is a comma for? Our two most general ways to look at it:
  • Show where dependent clauses add "extra" information/context to the independent clause!
  • Separate lists/clusters of adjectives or adverbs. Here is a great link on Buzzfeed that shows just how much a comma is needed for clear meaning when making a list!
  • The only time a comma is used to attach two independent clauses (sentences): 
    • use a comma, then a conjunction (for | and | nor | but | or | yet | so). This called a coordinating conjunction...
    • , + conjunction
      • Example:   We went to the store, but we did not buy anything.
    • Or, we can sometimes use a comma with a short sentence that is attached to a longer sentence, where the one sentence is operating as a dependent clause/"extra voice"
      • Examples:
        •  We loved going to the chocolate factory, I can tell you that much. 
        • My brother is like the fox, he is the ultimate trickster. (I would still use a semi-colon here just to be grammatically safe.)

Common Words that indicate dependent clauses:

Transition words: Also, indeed, either, neither, first, second, next, last, finally, although, however, for example, for instance, since, ...and more!

Prepositions: On, at, above, around, during, of, from, with, ... and more!

-ing verbs: Beginning, Running, Talking,   

  • At the start of sentences, these verb forms may be the start of a DEP 
    • Example:  Beginning with learning geometry, I started to struggle with math in high school.
  • Or they may be part of a noun phrase made up of an action (clue is that there is no SV right next to each other, just a V):
    • Example:  Beginning with learning geometry allows us to work our way up to calculus.

infinitives (to + verbs): To begin, To go, To add, To argue, ...

  • Same as -ing verbs




Let's Go Through Concepts of the Comma As Writers In The Process:


1. I stepped in a pile of horse poop Jill.   (What is "horse poop Jill"? The comma needs to come after the word 'poop' because 'Jill' is a dependent clause; her name gives the reader context to who is being told the statement.)


...and now for a string of complex modification:


2. Since I was seventeen I have lived alone.  (Why no comma? Again, here is a great link for us to review.)

3. Since I was seventeen, I have lived alone and supported myself. (What changes? The simple sentence became more complex, so that dependent clause now modifies to acts.)


4. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone.

5.  Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods.

6. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods and supported myself.

7. Since I was seventeen, I have lived alone in the woods, afraid of the world, and supported myself.

8. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods outside Baltimore and supported myself.

9. Since I as seventeen, I have lived alone in the woods outside Baltimore, Maryland, and supported myself.

10. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods outside Baltimore, Maryland, and supported myself on twigs and berries. 

Thursday, April 20, 2017

Edit: SV AGR

One of the bigger grammatical issues to edit out draft to draft is subject-verb agreement (S/V AGR), which means that the subject and its verb have to match in number (singular or plural) and person (first, second, third).

Identify, then Fix
1. Underline the subject
  •  If the subject is a noun phrase/multiple words, reduce the subject down to its proper pronoun so that you can better match it with the verb.
      • The amazingly bright Johnny = He
      • Johnny and Tom=They
      • The sisters and I=We

2. Circle the verb(s) that the subject 'acts on'
3. Ignore every other word in sentence to test for agreement of this pair
  • Use a verb chart for a visual aid/reminder (all regular, or typical, verbs will follow the top chart
  • Pay attention to sentences with multiple subjects 
      • 'and'= plural
      • 'nor' or "'or'=verb must agree with the subject closest it (200)
      • Collective nouns (where a group of people is referred to as one unit) such as jury, committee, crowd, and class are to be singular forms unless the idea in the sentence shows the individuals acting separately (see 201-202)
      • indefinite pronouns are treated as singular (200)
      • Who, which and that=agree with the antecedent 
      • A title of a work or company needs a singular verb!  (The Chicago Bears is my favorite team.)
      • Treat gerund phrases (when -ing verbs are used at start) as singular
      • ...and other special cases

Editing Your Essay
  • Read your first two (the intro and first body) paragraphs backwards, and diagram each sentence for its subject (underline) and verb (circle) pairs.
  • Make sure to then write the corrections above where you find a lack of agreement. Consult your textbook.



Tuesday, April 18, 2017

Coordination and Subordination (Review)

Techniques and Models To Inspire Our Own (216-17):

1.  Coordinate using a comma, followed by the right conjunction (FANBOYS) for the relationship.

  • Example: I failed calculus because I could not understand math concepts that I studied hours each night, but Bourdain failed in his early attempts at being a chef because his drug addiction made him lazy and disinterested.  
    •  [one text on each side of the , conjunction]
  • Example: Both Bourdain and I reached a breaking point with our separate struggles, so we promised ourselves to seek help from our friends and family.   
    •  [both texts connected as a plural subject, followed by the idea that parallels them on the other side of the , conjunction]

2. Coordinate using a semicolon, followed by a conjunctive adverb and comma.

  • Example: I failed calculus because I could not understand math concepts that I studied hours each night; however, Bourdain failed in his early attempts at being a chef because his drug addiction made him lazy and disinterested.
  • Example:  Both Bourdain and I reached a breaking point with our separate struggles; therefore, we promised ourselves to seek help from our friends and family.  
3. Subordinate using a subordinate conjunction (see 

  • Example: Although I failed calculus because I could not understand math concepts that I studied hours each night, Bourdain failed in his early attempts at being a chef because his drug addiction made him lazy and disinterested.
  • Example: I failed calculus because I could not understand math concepts that I studied hours each night, while Bourdain failed in his early attempts at being a chef because his drug addiction made him lazy and disinterested.
  • Example: Because both Bourdain and I reached a breaking point with our separate struggleswe promised ourselves to seek help from our friends and family.  

4. Coordinate using only a semicolon if the two sentences being combined have phrases within that help build a relationship between the idea in each sentence.
  • verbs match? Verbs from the same family? If so, this helps build continuity between two sentences.
  • Or, include a modifying clause in one of the sentences that  gets "picked up" in the other sentences.