Tuesday, April 25, 2017

Editing: Comma Usage

One of our goals with understanding the simple sentence and dependent clauses (DEP) and the role of the comma is to understand that they allow for a variety of syntax (sentence structure), which allows for your more complex ideas to be expressed in creative but coherent ways. 

Rather than getting mastered by grammar rules, try and master the fundamental rules of word structure that make our language.  (I mean, that is what many of you are already doing with texting language--creating a grammar.)


Independent Clause / the Simple Sentence (Review)

  • Nouns: person, place, thing
  • Verbs: show action
  • Subject:  noun or pronoun that performs the action
  • Object: noun or pronoun that receives the action
  • Includes a subject (noun/pronoun) + verb
    • Examples: I write. She coughs. They run. The lamp shines.

  • Often, though, we need to include the object (a noun, too) after the verb=
    • Examples: I write poetry. They run laps.



Before we look at the graphic, let's see how modifiers can create skillfully complex sentences out of basic information:


1. The famous Russian novelist Vladimir Nabokov once said, "Style and Structure are the essence of a book; great ideas are hogwash.” 

  • Simple sentence:  Vladimir Nabokov...said, "...."
2.  Since he is known for Lolita, a novel about a creepy old man obsessed with a little girl, a reader may be shocked to find that Nabokov thought structure was more important than the idea itself.

  • Simple sentence:   A reader may be shocked to find that Nabokov thought structure was more important than the idea itself.
  • "Since he is known for Lolita," = dependent clause that added context to subject
  • ", a novel about a creepy old man obsessed with a little girl," = dependent clause that adds meaning to the noun that comes right before it, Lolita. 
  • This entire phrase/clause is not necessary for a reader to understand the simple sentence, which is why commas are used to "put up a fence around it."  We can take out the entire clause and the sentence will still be grammatically clear:  
  • Since he is known for Lolitaa reader may be shocked to find that Nabokov thought structure was more important than the idea itself.


The Role of the Comma 
  • How do we look at dependent clauses and adjectives and adverbs?
  • Modifiers of basic meaning/thought of the sentence
  • Different types of context that add to the basic thought/sentence
  • What is a comma for? Our two most general ways to look at it:
  • Show where dependent clauses add "extra" information/context to the independent clause!
  • Separate lists/clusters of adjectives or adverbs. Here is a great link on Buzzfeed that shows just how much a comma is needed for clear meaning when making a list!
  • The only time a comma is used to attach two independent clauses (sentences): 
    • use a comma, then a conjunction (for | and | nor | but | or | yet | so). This called a coordinating conjunction...
    • , + conjunction
      • Example:   We went to the store, but we did not buy anything.
    • Or, we can sometimes use a comma with a short sentence that is attached to a longer sentence, where the one sentence is operating as a dependent clause/"extra voice"
      • Examples:
        •  We loved going to the chocolate factory, I can tell you that much. 
        • My brother is like the fox, he is the ultimate trickster. (I would still use a semi-colon here just to be grammatically safe.)

Common Words that indicate dependent clauses:

Transition words: Also, indeed, either, neither, first, second, next, last, finally, although, however, for example, for instance, since, ...and more!

Prepositions: On, at, above, around, during, of, from, with, ... and more!

-ing verbs: Beginning, Running, Talking,   

  • At the start of sentences, these verb forms may be the start of a DEP 
    • Example:  Beginning with learning geometry, I started to struggle with math in high school.
  • Or they may be part of a noun phrase made up of an action (clue is that there is no SV right next to each other, just a V):
    • Example:  Beginning with learning geometry allows us to work our way up to calculus.

infinitives (to + verbs): To begin, To go, To add, To argue, ...

  • Same as -ing verbs




Let's Go Through Concepts of the Comma As Writers In The Process:


1. I stepped in a pile of horse poop Jill.   (What is "horse poop Jill"? The comma needs to come after the word 'poop' because 'Jill' is a dependent clause; her name gives the reader context to who is being told the statement.)


...and now for a string of complex modification:


2. Since I was seventeen I have lived alone.  (Why no comma? Again, here is a great link for us to review.)

3. Since I was seventeen, I have lived alone and supported myself. (What changes? The simple sentence became more complex, so that dependent clause now modifies to acts.)


4. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone.

5.  Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods.

6. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods and supported myself.

7. Since I was seventeen, I have lived alone in the woods, afraid of the world, and supported myself.

8. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods outside Baltimore and supported myself.

9. Since I as seventeen, I have lived alone in the woods outside Baltimore, Maryland, and supported myself.

10. Since I was seventeen, Chris, I have lived alone in the woods outside Baltimore, Maryland, and supported myself on twigs and berries. 

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